We've recently handed back the first timed writing to our students. The first step was to revise our leads. We taught six "new and improved" types of leads to use and even gave them a handy acronym to remember them: QqacSs. (Like a duck says but with different spelling...)
Shocking Statistic or Surprising Fact.
Then, we provided time for students to revise their original timed essay leads while we provided one on one feedback. If needed, students were given until next class to complete the new one-paragraph lead. Extra rubrics are available in class if needed. Next up: we'll revise a body paragraph and learn to add support and elaboration!