How to Elaborate--body paragraphs

Today we started writing our body paragraphs for our editorials.  The goal is to write elaborated body paragraphs.  This means:

Elaborated— use of additional details, description, anecdotes, illustrations, and examples that further clarify meaning.  This includes information that answers the question," What do you mean?”

Start by planning the types of support you'll include:

Next, get those details to build and develop into the perfect proof to prove your reason.  This is a good basic organization for your body paragraphs.  (No leads or zingers here!  It's all about the reasons and support.)

 Next, write your paragraph and use the rubric to grade yourself!  

Turn it in to your teacher.  These paragraphs are due on October 24th. (a) and October 25th (b).

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Write your Lead! Think about your Zinger!

You're finally getting to write the editorial that will change the world, or at least your school.  The reader has to stay interested beyond the first paragraph though.  Use these leads we learned in class to craft your best opening paragraph. 
We also reviewed Zingers (last lines).  Although you don't need to write your Zinger yet, you should already have an idea of which one would match your lead.

LEADS to start an essay

Sensory details (photoshop): a description using sensory language (sight, smell, touch, hearing, and taste) that describes a scenario related to your topic that leads to the thesis.

Concession: a presentation of one or more opposing arguments that lead the reader to the writer’s thesis.

Quotation: a voice other than your own that reveals the issue or topic or a famous or well-known quote that could apply to your issue and leads to the writer’s thesis.

Anecdote: a brief story that captures the essence of the topic and then connects the story to the thesis.

Background or surprising fact: a statement that contains relevant, interesting background on the

topic or a surprising fact about the topic that sets up the writer’s thesis.

 

Zingers to end an essay

Prediction: an insight into how the future could be different--better, or worse.

Echo: circle back to the lead. For example:  Did you write an anecdote lead?  Write another version or an “ending” to the story.

Pointed question: Ask a question that leaves the reader thinking; should guide them to share your opinion.

Instruction to the reader: tells the reader exactly what they can do about the issue; could be a strong, punched statement that gets right to the point—a call to action!

  Remember:

LEAD + transition + THESIS = the introduction

Here's the rubric for the one paragraph introduction you'll turn in.  We'll write these in class but finish for homework.  They are due on 10/11 for B day and 10/12 for A day.

A winning thesis statement...

For your first timed writing, we wrote about whether or not students should be graded on their behavior.  We're working on improving those essays by revising the topic and choosing to write about something that we see in the world that needs to be changed.    We're writing EDITORIALS!

We've been "workshopping" our thesis statements but I'll include the template we've been using in class to help craft a concise thesis for a five paragraph essay.  The thesis will be the last line of the introductory paragraph.  We're writing them in class but some of you may need this resource at home as you revise topics and write your introduction paragraphs.